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The best way to improve health is to exercise daily. To what extent do you agree?

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The most effective method for having a better health is to practice exercise
everyday
Suggestion
every day
. In my opinion, doing a physical activity on a daily basis is a better way to developing a good health.
However
an
Suggestion
a
 balance diet
also
 contributes towards a healthy life. Many doctors advise people to walk for at least thirty minutes each day so as to bring an improvement in their health. Light exercises
such
 as walking, running or jogging is very beneficial for the heart and the body and do not require extreme conditions.
hese
Suggestion
These
Whose
Hese
 activities promote a better blood circulation and is
also
 good for the mental balance.
For instance
 a
persons
Suggestion
person
 who goes for jogging each morning would not only lose weight but would
also
 feel
destressed
facing or experiencing financial trouble or difficulty
distressed
 by socialising with other persons.
However a regular
Suggestion
However, a regular
 daily exercise is not the only factor which would allow us to remain in shape. We need a balanced diet as well. It is important that we control what we are eating because many
illness
Suggestion
illnesses
 are related to our consumption of salt and sugar. It is a known fact that hypertension and diabetes are caused by our food.
Therefore
 a healthy way of eating is as important to become fit. In conclusion, doing exercises
such
 as
walkig
close enough to be walked to
walking
, jogging or swimming is the most effective way of having a healthier condition,
however
 a good eating habit should
also
 be encouraged.
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