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Nowadays people live in the society where consumer goods are cheaper to buy. Do you think its advantages outweigh disadvantages?

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In
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 modern era, most of the
people
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 have become addicted to the
consumer
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goods
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. The Living standard of the
people
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 has improved with these
goods
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. Even
consumer
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goods
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 like automobiles, home appliances and mobile phones have become the status symbol for individuals. But, I think, the demerits of
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trend
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 cannot be overlooked. On one hand, there are a number of benefits of
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goods
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.
Firstly
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 a person can do all his or her household chores with
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one click of
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, they have washing machines and microwave ovens for washing clothes and to cook food within seconds respectively.
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,
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globalisation
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 everything is available in today's markets
people
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 buy
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 beyond their limits to look cool or stylish. They purchase branded mobile phones to show their bank balance to others.
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, we can talk with anyone throughout the globe with the help of cell phones. So,
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 the
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 good life of humans become very comfortable.
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, the disadvantages of
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goods
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 cannot be neglected, because the availability of
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goods
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 becomes the reason for the gap between the two generations. These days, young ones love to be online on social networking sites they even do not talk with their parents.
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,
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 who have
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branded gadgets or the latest cars earn respectable positions in
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society and
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 is a degradation of morality and social value. Adding to
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, home appliances like
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refrigerators
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refrigerator
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refrigerators
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 and air conditioners produce trash each day
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this
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 is increasing dangerously. That
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 leads to
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 pollution.
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 but not
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least, most of the technologies used for developing
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 products are harmful to human health and
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 why human life is going to
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 danger. In conclusion,
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the availability
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 of
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 products at an affordable price is a positive
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 as it helps
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 to live a better life.
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the negative
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 sides of the
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 cannot be forgotten. Social, personal and environmental problems are increasing
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this
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 and it might be a serious threat for the future generation.

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Task Response
The essay addresses the prompt by discussing both the advantages and disadvantages of consumer goods. Make sure to develop your ideas further and provide more specific examples to support your points.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs discussing advantages and disadvantages, and a conclusion. Try to improve transitions between ideas for better coherence.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • affordability
  • quality of life
  • overconsumption
  • environmental degradation
  • sustainable practices
  • economic growth
  • job creation
  • decline in quality
  • frequent replacements
  • standard of living
  • mass production
  • cheap labor
  • working conditions
  • exploitation
  • innovation
  • cost-effective
  • competitive
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