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In the past, shopping was a routine domestic task. Many people nowadays regard it as a hobby. To what extent do you think this is a positive trend?

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Shopping is a chore everyone does right from men and women, it’s a gift if you know the secret
to
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of
 it these days. Nowadays, people who have knowledge about shopping have their own blogs and social media pages in which they share their experience and knowledge with the people.
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, in my opinion shopping should be explored by
everyone but
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everyone, but
 it has its pros and cons and it should be done in a controlled manner. Shopping has become a trend nowadays among the youngsters and some may even consider shopping as their hobby. Teenagers and youngsters these days shop recklessly without even thinking. I consider even if you are shopping its very important to spend
money
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, Shopping has been an integral part of many families. People go and shop on many different occasions,
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 as festivals, weddings, family functions, birthdays,
etc
continuing in the same way
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 and if you have a family member who has knowledge about the latest trends and styles, they will not only help you on different family
occasions but
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occasions, but
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 help you keep up with the latest trends and they can
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 aid you to spend
money
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 as they are aware of the market.
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, as a coin has both sides, in life
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 there are two sides to any activity in life, a negative and a positive side. Nowadays, online shopping has become so easy and with the easy accessibility of
credits
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credit
 cards and easy loans, there are people who believe that shopping makes them happy when they are sad or when they are going through a
rough patch and in
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rough patch and
 the era of advertisements and artificial intelligence recommendations these people fall prey to
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 marketing agendas. Many times, these people end up wasting their
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money which
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money, which
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 turns out to be a total waste. To conclude, it is always instructed anything in excess is always injurious. It is very important to keep a balance between the positive and the negative aspects of anything. I
believe
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believe, although
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 enjoying luxury is an important aspect of life, but it is very essential to think twice before spending
money
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 on materialistic things and understand the importance of
money
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumerism
  • retail therapy
  • materialism
  • disposable income
  • economic growth
  • financial instability
  • environmental impact
  • social interaction
  • community building
  • emotional satisfaction
  • advertising influence
  • shopping habits
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