Children who are brought up in families that do no have large amounts of money are better prepared to deal with problems of adult life than children brought up by wealthy parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Those who are born and brought up in a poor background are often good in dealing with problems when they grow older compared to the
affluents
water mixed with waste matter
effluents
. In my opinion, indeed, those children lived a
proverty
the state of having little or no money and few or no material possessions
poverty
sricken
grievously affected especially by disease
stricken
life would value their life and learn to utilise the money effectively in the future.
Firstly
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, being raised in a surrounding without
well
Suggestion
good
financial background would help them to give value to their lives.
In other words
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, whatever the
resouces
available source of wealth; a new or reserve supply that can be drawn upon when needed
resources
and wealth they have, they will utilise it wisely.
For instance
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, materials required for studies, even though those are not costly items, the ensure that it is well maintained and can be used for a long time. They become more careful
for
Suggestion
in
of
about
using whatever they have.
Secondly
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, children raised from poor background would manage and spend the money carefully. Since they have struggled with their life in the childhood, they know the value of money and they won't spend carelessly. It
also
Linking Words
helps them to save
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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