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Some people believe that children should spend all of their free time with their families. Others believe that this is unnecessary or even negative. Discuss the possible arguments on both sides, and say which side you personally support.

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Each other of us had putted in arguments about children treatments or
child
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 minding in our family, definitely. Some of us believed that children should spend all of their free time with their families and some other believed opposite. The
first
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 one who wants the children to stay at home in leisure time, seems are the parents with the negativity sight to society risks.
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, these people mention to
child
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 abduction
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 becoming popular recently.
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, they talk about the personality of children that have shaped ninety percent before of 7th years old. So they must train at home. Of course, they need to be far from violent society.
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, some of parents believe the successful social lives of children in the future, depends on their playing with peers.
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 they worry about the character of their children, but
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 their attitude about
child
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 caring is about bring up a
child
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 independent and autonomous.
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, the confidence of children who brought up with peer pressure was very higher than children who played alone or just with their families in experiments. According to me, my
child
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 should be an autonomous
child
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 and he has to be independence in the future in his life. He has to learn about how he can defence of his rights. How he can convince others and how he should treat with the bullies in his social life.
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, it is not wonder if I say I totally agree with
this
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 opinion that children free time should spend with peers and other children, of course in safe environments.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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