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Some businesses find that their new employees lack basic interpersonal skills such as cooperative skills. What are the causes? Suggest possible solutions. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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In today’s ever changing and dynamic business environment, it is imperative that interpersonal
skills play
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skills, play
 a vital role in shaping the business health of the
company
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, recent studies have shown that nearly 40% of the new workforce in a
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company
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company's
 lack sound interpersonal skills.The causes and the plausible solutions are elaborated below.
Firstly
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, training acquired at college or
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on
 the previous job is a major concern. At the college level, communication is informal and student teacher relationships are more
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, the candidate is unable to adapt to the structured and formal environment that he/she has just stepped into the new
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. With regard to an experienced
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 entering a new
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, the
company
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 culture might not be his right fit and
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 he/she becomes resilient to the new
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. The solution to the above two cases is to provide constructive training and feedback before he/she is deployed
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 a permanent position.
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, the new and old group formation. In any organization, there is a fresh set of people joining in and an old and experienced workforce working along the guidelines of the
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. The new
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 out of enthusiasm, suggests ideas that are not relevant to the
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 leads to isolation and non cooperation of the
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. It would be advisable for the new
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 to understand
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 adjust and work for a considerable tenure to be able to speak effectively and be heard by the experienced workforce.
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, the digital age has brought about a significant reduction in interpersonal skills. New employees are too indulged in gadgets that when it is required for them to cooperate in meetings and conferences, they have been observed to be busy with their mobile phones giving a negative impression to the audience of his participation in ongoing event. A thorough rules and regulations mentoring must be implemented to sensitize the employees of the value of cooperation. The strength of a chain is measured by its weakest link and new employees are as vulnerable as the weakest link. So
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 every organization must take responsibility is addressing the discrepancies in interpersonal skills for better cooperation among employees.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • interpersonal skills
  • cooperative skills
  • face-to-face interaction
  • digital communication
  • non-verbal cues
  • active listening
  • education system
  • technical knowledge
  • soft skills
  • remote work
  • work environment
  • comprehensive training programs
  • workshops
  • teamwork
  • role-playing scenarios
  • open communication
  • collaborative efforts
  • educational institutions
  • curriculums
  • hybrid work models
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