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Some people think that having people from different nationalities and cultural background living together in the same country develop faster. Do you agree?

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It is of the opinion that citizens coming from different nations would result in faster development of the country. I completely agree with
this
view point
a mental position from which things are viewed
viewpoint
.
Firstly
, the immigrants
does not just bring
Suggestion
do not just bring
 their heritage and
culture but
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culture, but
also
 new ideas along with them.
Therefore
, it provides diversity in the
work place
a place where work is done
workplace
 and
hence
, resulting in
progression
Suggestion
the progression
 of the country.
Secondly
, when people from different backgrounds live together, they become more tolerant towards
eachother
Suggestion
each other
.
As a result
, they learn to work in harmony which is a very big plus point adding to the development of the nation.
Finally
, immigrants help in formation of tourism
that is
 the
bases
Suggestion
base
 income in many countries.
For
example countries
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example, countries
 like Malaysia and Thailand generate their maximum income for the tourist industry.
Moreover
, trade is
also
 increased with other countries resulting in more stable
economony
the system of production and distribution and consumption
economy
 and flow of
many
the most common medium of exchange; functions as legal tender
money
 from in and out of
country
Suggestion
the country
.
Hence
, it benefits the faster development of the nation. To conclude, I believe that heterogeneous communities are much more successful as compared to
hemogenous
all of the same or similar kind or nature
homogeneous
homogenous
 ones.

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