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Many people like to wear fashionable clothes. What do you think is the case? Is this good or a bad thing?

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We are living in a world of
fashion
.Nowadays, most of the people have their of
fashion
 statements and style icons. So, many people love to wear designer attires to show themselves updated
in
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with
 the
fashion
 world. In my
opinion it
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opinion, it
 is good to wear fashionable clothes depending on the
occassions
an event that occurs at a critical time
occasion
 or events that you are attending. If you are having a good
fashion
 sense it will give you more confidence and you will look different.
For example
, if you are attending a wedding party and you are wearing a
unique fashionable
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unique, fashionable
cloth
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cloth, then
then
 everyone will notice that and it will boost your inner confidence.
However
, I will not suggest fashionable clothes when you are visiting a temple or a church. At the end, everything depends on your mentality towards wearing fashionable clothes. If you want to wear designer dresses you can wear wherever you want. On the
otherhand
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other hand
, it is not good to wear revealing or exposing in a social
occassion
an event that occurs at a critical time
occasion
 because it will be embarrassing. Changes
comes
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come
 at a price, it is not good to buy expensive clothes disregarding your financial condition. There is a chance that
mostly
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most
 young people will buy more expensive clothes and throw themselves to big financial crisis. To summarize, it is good to wear fashionable clothes in order to showcase your style statement in
this
modern dynamic
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modern, dynamic
world but
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world, but
 make sure that it will not lead to
debit
the state of owing something (especially money)
debt
.

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