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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programme's (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree?

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Service to humanity means being sacrificial. It is argued that charity work and voluntary services should be included in the High School Curriculum. I agree with
this
 statement;
This
 essay will analyse how community services will make youth better leaders and become responsible.
To begin
 with; A major benefit that accompanies volunteering services is the development of good Leadership skills. Community services require that a volunteer is in charge of a particular project or assignment under a mentor. With the help of these mentors, the younger ones learn can learn new leading abilities that will be useful to them in the future.
For example
, when I volunteered to work as a recycling agent for my city, I learned the act of effective communication and delegation from my supervisor; these helped me when I was made a manager in my career. There is
therefore
 no doubt; that, volunteering is indeed profitable to youth. Another point to consider is that; Rendering free Service makes young people responsible. The developmental phase of youth is mostly at high school;
Therefore
, youngsters will want to try different activities out of curiosity and lots of free time, it is reported that 90 percent of minors engage in drugs and sexual acts, during high school. In order to curb
this
 menace, involving a juvenile in volunteering services
such
 as; helping in an Olds People Home or teaching children sport activities, will serve as a good distraction from engaging in unwholesome activities;
Hence
, moulding into becoming responsible adults. In conclusion, it is evident that, the need to include community services as part of the school curriculum is inevitable, as it will help make students better leaders and become more responsible.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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