Some people believe that it is essential to include physical education classes in the curriculum for all school age children. Others think that children's time is better spent on more academic subjects. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

Nowadays, both social activities and study at school are important to youngster and 2 kinds of sides have to be balanced. Many people think that physical
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