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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #university #students #study #subjects #future #science #technology
People have different views concerning whether tertiary students should
study
 their desirable specialization or not,
Although
 there is some truth in claiming that studying potential disciplines has a
favorable
encouraging or approving or pleasing
favourable
 outcome.
Iinclined
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I inclined
 to believe that they should select their
specialty
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Specialty
.
Onone
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On one
 hand, there are two principal reasons why some people find it more
suitablestudy
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suitable study
 applied
science
 and technology.
First
 and foremost, the dominating of these areas in the world of business. To clarify, many people
haveattracted
Suggestion
have attracted
 to
workthese
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work these
 fields due to its competitive salaries and convenient job opportunities. Another contributing factor is a high potential career progress, which is being offered.
For instance
, Cambridge University found in a recent business
study
 that
applicable
Suggestion
applied
science
, especially computer
science
, will likely experience high demanding
infollowing
Suggestion
in following
 30 years due to its high growing application in many fields.
Consequently
, there are some
peoplehold
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people holding
people hold
 the nation that studying
theuseful
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the useful
 discipline in the future is highly considered.
On the other hand
, I would
saidwith
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say by
said by
said with
said to
 those who supposed
studyingpreferable
 branch of knowledge is more advisable.
Initially
,
ifperson
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if person
study
 and practice his
favoritespecialty
, he will
probablyhappy
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probably happy
.
In other words
, we spend most of our time
inwork
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at work
in work
 which has a
greateffect
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great effect
inour
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on our
in our
 psychological state. To illustrate, teachers
such
 as math teachers are experiencing a major work stress with their pupils due to the difficulty of their syllabus, whereas they are often
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glad this
 is owed
tothey
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until they
to they
 had selected to
study
 and teach
this
 subject. An addition to that the country cannot keep developing with only a minor
numbers
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number
 of
specialties
an expert who is devoted to one occupation or branch of learning
specialists
.
Thus
, it would be the proper situation working in our preferable field. It can be concluded that despite studying specific majors
such
 as
science
 and technology have a great future, it seems to me that students should have freedom to select their desirable area of
study
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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