Ordinary people try to copy famous people either reading magazines or watching TV. Why they do this. Do you think it is a good idea to copy famous people.

The showbiz world is leaving deep effects on common people. As they are following the celebrities on social media, television or in periodicals.
Although
this
is
insane but
Accept comma addition
insane, but
the trend is increasing over the past decade. In my opinion, people should live in a natural way rather to mimic someone. Specifically, the lifestyle of celebrities is very
luxries
displaying luxury and furnishing gratification to the senses
luxurious
that an ordinary person can
afforad
be able to spare or give up
afford
it.
However
, a certain class of people set the trend to follow famous people's style.
This
class of ordinaries not only spend beyond their limits but
also
take loans to enjoy a style of favourite hero. Mostly, young generation is
adicts
Suggestion
Adicts
addict
audits
to the
favourtisim
of
celebraties
a widely known person
celebrities
. While following the famous
celeberity
a widely known person
celebrity
celebrities
people changed their hairstyle, clothes, eating
habbit
Suggestion
habits
habit
and a lot more.
In addition
, nowadays popular
barnds
a name given to a product or service
brands
bands
bonds
earn a lot because followers are excited to buy the things
weared
affected by wear; damaged by long use
worn
by the models on television or in a magazine. The fashion industry is paying millions to their models to make it more trendy among
public
Suggestion
the public
. A published report show
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