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Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed beacuse of technology. In what ways has technology affected the tyoes of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development?

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Interaction among people have changed in a present
time due
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time, due
 to
technology
. The
technology
 has connected the humans from worldwide and the bond
among
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between
 people are much stronger. Due to these
fact
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facts
, it can be considered as a positive progress. With the
development
 of
technology
, the world has become smaller and we
feel the
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feel, the
 less distance with each other.
For instance
, in the past, there was no any convenient means of communication and people had to write letters and wait longer periods to be
recived
conforming to the established language usage of educated native speakers
received
 by another person.
However
, now a
peron
a human being
person
 can not only talk to another being sitting in any corner of
ther
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the
their
world but
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world, but
also
 have face to face conversation through video calls and chats.
Moreover
, in the matter of privacy,
technology
are
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is
alot
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a lot
more safer
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safer
 than the traditional way of conversation through letters.
Although
, the
development
 of technologies has some demerits
such
 as people being more addicted to social
medias
a means or instrumentality for storing or communicating information
media
 and others from online as well as ignoring the people near us, the merits of the
development
 still outweigh the demerits. Social
medias
a means or instrumentality for storing or communicating information
media
medians
 have connected our friends and relatives as well as a lot of other people far away from us. In a nutshell,
technology
 has joined people together and the relationship among people have
strengthen resulting
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strengthened, resulting
strengthened resulting
this
 as a positive progress.
Moreover
, it can be predicted that the
development
 of
technology
 has still more to go making the world really small.

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