It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punsihment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? what sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?

It is quite evident that
childrean
a young person of either sex
children
are the future of the nation.
Therefore it
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Therefore, it
is very essential for descendants to learn about right and wrong in
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of them or themselves
their
growing
age which
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age, which
plays a vital role in become an optimistic in
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the future
. I presume
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that penance
is quite eminent
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in
this
development.
First
of all, parents which are well known as semi god of their infants, are responsible for
child
growth.
However
the examples set up by the parents in front of their wards are easily followed at the young age.
Secondly teahers
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Secondly, teachers
Secondly teachers
are well familiar with the weakness and strengths of the students. To make
child
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the child
a successful and well being
person it
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person, it
is crucial for parents as well as teachers to punish them.
Intially
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Initially
youngsters feel hard when they get punished by their
guardians but
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guardians, but
later they find it was useful.
On the other hand
, sometimes punishment gives a very adverse outcomes. Children commits suicide or even left their homes when they were under penalty.
To
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In
my mind, the positive results of punishments are far more than the negative one. There are numerous types of punishments.
For instance
, if a
child
indulge too much in technology and lacks their concentration in
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study, then
then
it could be
punishes
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punished
by the seizing their gadgets and not gives back until they agrees
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to
study.
Likewise there
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Likewise, there
are other punishment like less pocket money
,
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,
disallow them to meet their bad friends and
many
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much
more. To conclude, though penance is indispensable for leading a
child
to right way in
life but
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life, but
it is effective only in
limits
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the limits
. When it
cross
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crosses
its
limts
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limits, then
limits then
then
punishment becomes the reason of bad life or sometimes the end of life.

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