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People tend to believe that all young adults should undertake a period of unpaid work for the good of the community. Do you agree or disagree?

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The youth of today are generally considered to lack social knowledge and experience which are of crucial importance in their future development. To solve
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 problem, some
people
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 suggest that they should undertake a period of voluntary
work
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 in the local
community
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. Personally, I think its pros far outweigh the cons. Undoubtedly, it can be a win-win approach –
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, it will benefit both the young and the
community
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 enormously if young students and employees do a certain period of unpaid
work
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. By helping the elderly, the sick and the disabled directly or participating in charitable activities like raising funds or offering free consultation, young
people
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 will certainly gain and accumulate some valuable first-hand experience and know more about
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society.
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, young
people
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 with
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 experiences are more likely to become the most motivated ones in academic study or at
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, and eventually become responsible citizens of the society. As far as the
community
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 is concerned, it will definitely become better with so many zealous young volunteers who are ready to help.
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, there may be some disadvantages if the young provide free
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 helping
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 in need.
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, it may conflict with their normal study or
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 if not arranged well.
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 the result may be not as desirable as what is expected. But I think
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 sort of problem can be easily taken care of by meticulous planning by the authorities.
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,
competitiveness
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 of modern life and
influence
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 of global culture have isolated children from
neighbourhood
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the neighbourhood
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. So,
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 a step would be very beneficial to make today’s children feel part of the
community
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.
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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