Money is important in most people’s lives. Although some people think it is more important than others. What do you feel are the right uses of money? What other factors are important for a good life?

Modern
technology
with its advantages and disadvantages has changed today’s world enormously. Communication allows people all over the world to stay in contact with each other.
For instance
, I can easily exchange e-mails with a good friend of mine who recently had to move back to her mother country, Malaysia.
Furthermore
, if I have to make a really important decision or something is bothering me, I simply have to press the buttons on my mobile phone in order to ask my parents or a good friend for advice.
Additionally
,
technology
remarkably contributes towards making everyday procedures more convenient as well as helping to transmit messages rapidly.
For example
, an appointment that cannot be met due to an unexpected incident can quickly be cancelled by writing a text message or, in terms of business, employees can send an e-mail cancelling or postponing a meeting which will be received within seconds by their business partners. While improvements in
technology
are, to a large extent, helpful, they do have a disadvantageous side to them. The most significant disadvantage is the
westernisation
assimilation of Western culture; the social process of becoming familiar with or converting to the customs and practices of Western civilization
Westernisation
of traditional cultures, which we can see in the growing number of fast food outlets
for example
. We can
also
see
this
in the way that foreign words are being incorporated into local languages. On the whole, I agree to a great extent that
technology
is bringing people closer together and
this
can only be a good thing, but the disadvantage is that people may take ideas from other cultures and forget their own traditions

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