In many countries, the amount of crime is increasing. What do you think are the main causes of this? How can we deal with those causes?

Today there is a big issue everywhere with
crime
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the crime
.
This
essay will
first
discuss what I believe are some causes of
crime
,
then
it will go on to offer several solutions.
First
, there are several causes of criminality.
To begin
, a large part of
crime
is a result of poverty. When people are poor or don’t have a means of supporting themselves or their families legally, they are forced to resort to
crime
.
For example
, in
Alberta Canada
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Alberta, Canada
, which is the heart of petroleum production here, when the price of oil crashed, everyone lost their jobs and crimes like theft and robbery went sky high. Another cause of
crime
is lack of education. Education provides people with options and opportunities in
life
for employment, if a person has no schooling, it is hard for them to compete with others for limited job opportunities.
For instance
, my
neighbor
a person who lives (or is located) near another
neighbour
failed to finish high school and joined a gang
instead
, now he is in jail for crimes he committed as a part of that illegal organization.
Finally
, a great cause of
crime
is broken families. Children who grow up without strong support from parents can lose their way in
life
and end up in
crime
. To illustrate, children from families with problems like alcoholism and drug abuse may not learn proper values and socialization and end up in trouble later in
life
. Statistics Canada reports that a large proportion of children from problem families grow up to have trouble with the law.
Second
, there are solutions for the criminality within society.
First
, for the poverty, governments should provide social services like free
healthcare
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health care
and dental services to poor people so that they can
spent
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spend
what little money they have on their families.
For example
, in Finland, where government provides these services for free, there are fewer instances of poor people forced into
crime
.
Secondly
, if there is
free education
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free, education
offered to citizens, parents will be able to support their kids better and those kids will grow up with skills to get good jobs in the future and stay out of trouble, like
my
refers to the speaker or writer
I
previously mentioned
neighbor’s
brother
,
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,
who did not turn to gangs but graduated from university
instead
, and he saved his older brother from a
life
of
crime
.
Lastly
, regarding families with problems like substance abuse, there are social services like treatment programs and counsellors to help. To illustrate, there are places in my city where people with addictions can go to seek treatment for their problems enabling them to take care of their families properly. In conclusion, though there are many causes of
crime
, we have many solutions to remedy the root
causes
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Causes
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic disparity
  • propensity
  • recidivism
  • deterrent
  • rehabilitative
  • judicial system
  • corruption
  • socioeconomic
  • alienation
  • stigmatization
  • decriminalization
  • enforcement
  • gentrification
  • preemptive measures
  • intervention strategies
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