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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organization. Why might this be the case? What are the disadvantages of being self-employed?

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In recent times, despite the demerits of being self employed, many people would rather work for themselves than working for firms and organizations.
This
 current trend can be attributed to the unhealthy job environment and lack of job satisfaction.
To begin
 with, unhealthy work environment is a major reason why most people prefer working for themselves.
This
 is because the goal of many big organizations is to make profit, and
as a result
, they put their workers under pressure.
Therefore
, employees are compelled to put up extra hours and even take their jobs, home; all these at the expense of their health and well being.
In addition
, Job satisfaction is a major concern for most workers. People believe that, if they toil for themselves, they can optimally utilize their skills, rather than working for companies where their abilities are grossly undermined.
For example
, during a survey, 90% percent of small market entrepreneurs responded that, they left their jobs and decided to start their own businesses; because, they were not given roles where they could express their abilities. These reasons explain why people would work for themselves
instead
 of getting paid jobs.
Nevertheless
, being an entrepreneur is not devoid of being disadvantaged; An example, is the financial burden. For any personal business to thrive, there is a need to finance basic amenities.
Such
 as office space, power, tax tariffs etc. Most entrepreneurs end up in financial debts due to insufficient funds; Futhermore, lack of structure could affect small business owners. Unlike Cooperate Organizations where they have structures and personnels delegated with responsibilities. Entrepreneurs are solely in charge of all decisions of the business.
Therefore
, if there are no goals and structures in place;
such
 businesses are likely to go into Oblivion. In conclusion,
although
 there are benefits of working for oneself,
however
, the cons,
such
 as financial pressure and lack of a corporate structure should be considered before any individual ventures in it.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employed
  • company
  • organization
  • freedom
  • independence
  • income potential
  • flexibility
  • working hours
  • working location
  • passions
  • interests
  • decision-making
  • business practices
  • disadvantages
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