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Today more people are travelling than before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveler?

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Nowadays, with the
advancemnets
encouragement of the progress or growth or acceptance of something
advancements
 in various means of transportation, there has been a surge seen in the number of people going from one place to another. Though there are myriad of reasons behind
this
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 increase of
travellers which
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travellers, which
wiile
the capability of conscious choice and decision and intention
will
 be discussed
aongwith
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 the benefits of
this
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 travelling in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin
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 with, let us delve into the reasons
of
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for
this
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ris
move upward
rise
is
risk
 in travelling that the previous years.
First
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 and foremost, people
travel
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 to get relief from day to day life. To explain, as with the technological breakthroughs, the various means of
transportatins
a facility consisting of the means and equipment necessary for the movement of passengers or goods
transportation
such
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 as road, train and air
travel
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 have made travelling very affordable for people. So, people prefer to go
near by
close at hand
nearby
 places to get relief from household chores whenever they are free as compared to past years.
In addition
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, people
travel
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 for
business
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 and trade purposes. To substantiate, since the globalisation have affected each and every trade,
business
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 has
also
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 become international encouraging people to enhance their
business
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 and trade by travelling and connecting worldwide. To illustrate, a recent survey conducted by
National Sample Survey Office
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the National Sample Survey Office
,
NewDelhi
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New Delhi
 in 2018 in the India, on a 100 successful businessmen revealed that 90% of them were travelling
ut
away from home
out
art
 of
city
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the city
 once in a week as compared to
past
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the past
 when the
business
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 were on
small scale
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a small scale
 and they did not feel any need to
travel
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.
On the other hand
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, let us shed some light on the advantages for the people. Primarily, travelling will help to flourish
business
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 companies globally. To clarify, as people
travel
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 to other places and countries to connect and making some deals,
business
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 will reach at
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next levelwhich
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the next level, which
the next level which
next level which
 is more profitable and making
ones
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one's
 identity at
national and international level
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the national and international level
.
Furthermore
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, travelling make people
more healthy
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healthier
 and fresh. To explain, though it takes
large time
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a large time
 to
travel
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 from one place to
another but
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another, but
 travelling to
ones
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one
one's
favorite
something regarded with special favor or liking
favourite
palce
a point located with respect to surface features of some region
place
pace
piece
 on
weekend
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weekends
the weekend
a weekend
 makes people cheerful and happy increasing the level of serotonin in their blood. To cite an example, Dr.
Sigmunf
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 Freud, an eminent
psychonalyst
a licensed practitioner of psychoanalysis
psychoanalyst
 in his study
oon
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of
on
in
 human
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 and cognitive
skille
an ability that has been acquired by training
skills
 has asserted that people who
travel
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twce
two times
twice
tours
 in a year to new place were less prone to stress and depression in
this
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 contemporary era. To encapsulate, it can be concluded that undoubtedly people in
this
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 modern era are travelling more as compared to people in
past
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the past
becaus
for the reason that; on account of
because
 of
plethora
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the plethora
a plethora
 of reasons
such
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 as to get relief from household chores and for
business
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 purposes. Not only
this
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 travelling provide people with health
benefits but
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benefits, but
also
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 businesses will flourish globally.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Technological advancements
  • Low-cost airlines
  • Globalization
  • Professional development
  • Social media platforms
  • Exotic locations
  • Cultural exchange
  • Personal growth
  • Adaptable
  • Open-minded
  • Mental health
  • Daily routines
  • Responsibilities
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