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Recently, abortion increases rapidly and becomes a controversial topic. Some people suppose that abortion should be legal while others are against it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays we can see there is a huge count of abortion
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rates, which
 is growing very fast. One set of people say
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 must be implemented in a proper way while the others oppose
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 should not happen anytime. Let’s discuss both sides. On the one hand, the number of miscarriage counts
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has increased
 today. People say it purely depends on their personal interest and opinion and no one can debate about it. But they want
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 to be done officially. The Government must impose a rule to make it happen officially to avoid future issues. As
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 is a sensitive issue,
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 should not create a bad impact because they are already taking
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 decision in depression.
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, I recently saw a piece of information in the newspaper
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 doing abortions is accepted in a few countries, but they have not specified the country names.
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, if we see the other set of people oppose to
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 argument. They say miscarriage leads to severe
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 issues. It affects the individual’s
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 badly. By doing
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 the individual and their family members get affected physically and mentally and it creates a huge amount of stress and pain.
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, one of my friends had
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a miscarriage
 recently and because of that, she faced a lot of
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 issues by taking more medicines. In my opinion, abortion depends on an individual’s interest and unless it is not affecting their
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,
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 can be done on their own without anyone’s advice. In conclusion,
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, they are both sides of people having views on abortion, the individual must think twice before doing it and consulting with their family members and to think
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about
 the future implications. It is not a very happy activity as it affects the people around them. The Decision should be wise and correct.
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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