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Some people think that government should take care of disadvantaged people such as unemployees or the homeless. Do you agree or disagree

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Government, is the one most important
factors
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factor
 in economic growth and social welfare of the nation. Some individuals think that
administration
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the administration
 should take care of some less fortunate and roofless people. I completely agree with the statement and will deliberate about my perspective in the chasing paragraphs. To initiate with
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home is notion that only nations of homeless carefully appreciate and to elaborate
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in overcrowded
countrues
a politically organized body of people under a single government
countries
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 as India
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there are
plethora
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a plethora
 of endangered humans who are not capable of buying roof over their head. So it becomes the duty of the authority to look over them.
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natural disasters cause a savage destruction
to
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of
 the homes of mankinds
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 So government must provide accommodation
to
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for
 them.
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, if government
provide
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provides
 some employment opportunities to idle, people can do some
work
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 because the hardest
work
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 in the world is being out of
work
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.
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if job seekers will get
jobs
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jobs, then
then
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 their mind
only focus
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only focuses
 on their
work
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 and not get diverted towards illegal activity.
Secondly
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,
system
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the system
 should organize some campaigns to provide practical training to illiterate people and make them able to earn their bread and butter. To conclude
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,
authorities
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the authorities
 must take care of their
free lancer
a writer or artist who sells services to different employers without a long-term contract with any of them
freelancer
 and underprivileged people as they are
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 a part of
nation
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the nation
a nation
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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