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Science can increase people's lifespan up to 100 years. There are projections that scinece may further increase lifespan to 200 years.

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Scince
a particular branch of scientific knowledge
Science
Sciences
 is a remarkable way to explore the world. Recently science claims to expand human
lifespan
upto
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up to
 100 years. It is projected that
scince
a particular branch of scientific knowledge
science
sins
since
 may increase human
lifespan
 to 200 years. But as usual
this
 discovery has
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 own advantages and disadvantages.
This
lifespan
 expanding discovery provides the
oppertunity
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunity
 for human race to taste the technological modern life style. People may get a way to see their great grandchildren.
For example
, people from
ninties
the decade from 1890 to 1899
nineties
 will have the
oppertunity
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunity
 to explore the power of
nano-technology
the branch of engineering that deals with things smaller than 100 nanometers (especially with the manipulation of individual molecules)
nanotechnology
. On
ther
definite article
the
 other hand it has a huge disadvantage of unemployment.
This
 technological revolution
will deprived
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will deprive
 the youngsters to get a job. Civilization will go towards a chaos.
For example
, due to
this
 100
years
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year
lifespan
 government has to provide pension for a long time to the
government's
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government
 employees.
Scince
a particular branch of scientific knowledge
Science
Since
 always shows us two paths
by
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of
 discovery. We need to
chose
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choose
 the correct path for
future
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the future
. Get a 100 years life may be a blessing for family oriented people at the same time it
creats
make or cause to be or to become
creates
 a
unemployement
the state of being unemployed or not having a job
unemployment
 and gloomy future for youngsters.
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