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Some organisations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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The topic of employees' dressing sense is often argued about. Some believe that workers should give due importance to the workplace dress code; others reject
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 idea and believe that level of
work
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 is far superior to physical outlook. I agree with the latter approach of measuring an employee's worth b
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of
his
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 rather than his physical getup. Advocates of smart dressing at the workplace should be applauded for their efforts to groom their subordinates.
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 is because ensuring a respectable dress code will eventually enable them to represent their respective companies in reputable events of national or international level without facing any criticism on their outlook. While v
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the value
a value
of dressing in w
orkplace
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the workplace
workplaces
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an not
can not
cannot
be denied, yet there are people who believe that q
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the quality
of
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 is far superior to one's physical appearance. They argue that if a person is dressed thoughtfully, but fails to meet the
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 related requirements,
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 his dressing will not be able to help him in retaining his position in office.
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, a person who is dressed up casually, but delivers up to the mark
work
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, can not only retain but
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 excel in his p
ostion.
the particular portion of space occupied by something
position
possession
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 I cannot agree more with the idea of measuring workers' capabilities through their
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.
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 can be i
llustarted
clarify by giving an example of
illustrated
by taking examples of various companies, including a famous telecom company, t
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Telenor
 with no dress code restriction. Yet their employees brought laurels to the company with various international awards; all
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 is attributed to their
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instead
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 of style. To conclude, dressing plays a vital role in grooming and disciplining employees.
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, I agree that an employee might be
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 known by his looks, but he is eventually remembered only by his
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. I am confident that in order to ensure optimal growth of employees, companies should strive to achieve a balance between dressing and
work
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 quality.

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