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Study show that criminals have a low level of education. For this reason some people believe that the best way to reduce crime is to educate people in prison, so they can get a job when they leave prison. Do you agree or diagree?

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Wen
discussing
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discusses
is discussing
 whether education programs in
prison
has
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have
 a role in decreasing
crime
 rates, one should bear in mind the complexity of the issue. Some people believe that educating people in
prison
has
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have
 no
affect
a phenomenon that follows and is caused by some previous phenomenon
effect
 on
crime
 rate because prisoners are already at high risk to repeat their actions in comparison to the rest of the
society
. Others, including myself, think that educational programs are valuable and will reduce
crime rate
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the crime rate
crime rates
. In
this
 essay, I will give arguments and
explenations
a statement that makes something comprehensible by describing the relevant structure or operation or circumstances etc.
explanations
explanation
 to support my opinion. One point in favour of my opinion is that
education
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educational
 programs, which broaden's the prisoner's basic knowledge, allow him to incorporate in the daily activities and jobs of the community.
For example
, a recent study from the Hebrew University showed that inmates who completed their high school tests while in
prison
 had 20% less
chances
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chance
 of
comitting
perform an act, usually with a negative connotation
committing
 a
crime
 again.
This
 shows that education can give criminals the basic tools in order to be a part of our
society
. Another view to support my assumption is that non formal educational programs dealing with anger management can teach the prisoners how to cope with social issues and react
accordingly
. Israeli inmates,
for example
, that graduated anger management courses while in
prison
where
have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)
were
 reported to be involved in less criminal activities,
acording
(followed by 'to') in agreement with or accordant with
according
 to the Israeli Police
Departement
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Department
.
This
 demonstrates, that by teaching prisoners how to divert anger they will be able to be a part of our
society
, and engage in daily
activites
any specific behavior
activities
. In conclusion, I agree with the above mentioned statement and think that teaching people in
prison
 will
gave
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give
 them the tools they need in order to be a part of our community again. It is the only way to incorporate them into our
society
.
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