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Culture is turning similar around the world. What are the reasons ? What are the negative and positive aspects?

#culture #world #aspects
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The modern era is characterized by an interconnected
world
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. Since the end of the
World
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 Word II, markets
became
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have become
 more interdependent,
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, the development of the Internet boosted up the circulation of the information and the
culture
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 which nowadays is becoming more similar everywhere on the planet. Many people believe that
this
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 process, called globalization, is positive because ideas
such
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 as the freedom of speech can spread around the
world
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; others believe that we are experiencing a serious
homologation
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. In the
second
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 half of the 20th century, the concept of global market arose, with the multinational, especially from the United States that opened branches all over the
world
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, spreading standardized habits,
culture
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 and status symbols.
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 process was
empathized
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empathizing
 with the advent with the coming of the Internet, that undoubtedly helped a lot in shaping a "global
culture
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". With the
World
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 Wide Web, in almost every corner of the
world
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, people watch the same movies, read the same books and buy the same products.
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 global
homologation
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 poses a serious problem: all different cultures around the globe may risk disappearing forever under the advance of the new global
culture
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. If one day the new global civilization will replace the countless manifestations of the
human's
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human
 creativity the
world
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 surely will become more boring and less worth to travel around.
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, an advantage of
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 process of cultural unification is the more easy diffusion of liberal ideas
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 as the freedom of speech, the freedom of movement and, more generally, the spreading of a
culture
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 more respectful of the individual. If the new global
culture
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 will be able to embrace
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this values
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these values
this value
,
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 it will become more difficult for any kind of authoritarian regime to suppress these human rights, due to the decentralized nature of the internet.
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