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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing transport. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Some countries today invest huge sums of money in building infrastructures like railway and roads for public transportation. While some believe that it is more logical to spend a lot of money on constructing the mode of transport mentioned above, others
on the other h
and argue
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hand, argue
that funds should be spent on making the already existing ones better.
This
 essay will discuss both sides of the argument and provide evidence as to why money should be used to improve the other means in place. It is certainly true that fast trains just like the name are one of the fastest methods of transportation. If a car will spend an hour getting to a particular destination, a fast train
in c
ontrast will
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contrast, will
spend about thirty minutes reaching the same place. So why not invest in these advanced locomotives? A research in Havard university depicts it as the most p
refered
more desirable than another
preferred
means of mobility by the masses because of its' time saving quality.In short, some folks will support
this
 idea because of
t
his characteristics.
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these characteristics
this characteristic
However
, other individuals might back the idea for the government to put more on public transportation rather than railways. A case in point is that setting up railways require a lot of resources. A report in the media claims that developed countries like the united states and developing countries like china budgets virtually 50 times for railways when compared to roads and other means.
This
 same situation cannot be compared to
third
 world countries where there is little or no amount to embark on
such
 an expensive project.
In addition
, when these countries decide to go through with it,
such
 e
ndavours
a purposeful or industrious undertaking (especially one that requires effort or boldness)
endeavours
are mostly abandoned along the way, merely because of lack of capital to continue.
Therefore
, I believe that dedicating finances to these two options is equally important.
However
, I will advise the leadership of every nation to consider its' pocket before making a decision about which one is better.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • efficient
  • congestion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • connectivity
  • economic growth
  • public transportation
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