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I, along with my wife, had been there to celebrate our wedding anniversary.

#wife #anniversary
Dear Sir, I am writing to express my displeasure with the experience I had at your restaurant yesterday.
While
 the Service itself was fine, there were issues with the meal we were served. I,
along with
 my wife, had been there to celebrate our wedding anniversary. I had an entire evening planned, starting with a
candle light
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 dinner at the restaurant, followed by a cake cutting at the same venue. We were expecting our friends to join us.
However
, none of the above plans worked out
due to
 the chaos created by the incorrect
food
 served. Let me explain
you
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the problem, my wife is a vegan and she ordered
for
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a
non diary
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food
. When her dish was served, she
double checked
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 the ingredients with the waiter and on confirmation, she started eating it. Not only was she served with the
non vegan
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food
, but
also
 it had seafood which she was allergic
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. I had to rush her to the hospital and
thus
 celebrated the anniversary night at the medical canteen. On enquiring, I learnt that the
food
 which was supposed to be served to the table next to
ours'
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 was served to us. Is it possible for the restaurant to number the tables? I reckon that system would serve as a solution to the
mix-up related
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 issues. I sincerely hope you would personally look into
such
 issues and prevent them from future
occurance
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occurrence
occurrences
. Thank you for considering. Your Wellwisher, Sabari Raja A R

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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