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it is sometimes thought that people who travel outside of their own country are more tolerant and understanding of others. To what extent do you agree?

#people #travel #country
As an avidly travelling
person
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 consider myself questioning
this
 very thought if people like me and
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 are grown more tolerant and understanding.
it
Suggestion
It
 is very true that people
lear
gain knowledge or skills
learn
 a lot through their journey outside of their own
country perhaps
Accept comma addition
country, perhaps
this
 can be attributed to how they observe and learn different outcomes outside
thier
of them or themselves
their
 comfort zone.
when
Suggestion
When
 you travel outside your country you meet a lot of
indivisuals
a human being
individuals
 with different tolerance and behaviour levels as an
outsider one
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outsider, one
 would feel quite often be obliged to adjust themselves to the other
person
's level of understanding in terms of both tolerance and behaviour. So it is quite evident to say that one would tend to change and grow to be more tolerant and understanding
.
Accept space
.
on
Suggestion
On
 a personal level people around me who have been abroad for a while and later return back home showed a different attitude and tolerance towards things in a positive manner
.
Accept space
.
this
Suggestion
This
 could be attributed to being exposed to different cultures and ideas and self assessment of those ideas with your own understanding leading to a different level of understanding and openness. As an avid
traveler
a person who changes location
traveller
 myself people have conveyed to me positively about me being more tolerant and understanding ever since
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 have been outside the country
,
Accept space
,
which
further
 has strengthened my assessment on whether
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 have changed
.
Accept space
.
which
Suggestion
Which
 leads to me to conclude by saying that travelling does
infact
Suggestion
in fact
 make a
person
's personal development become more
retrified
having low density
rarefied
terrified
 and the
person
 more tolerant and understanding
.
Accept space
.

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