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Many people buy new phones and laptops to keep with the latest technology. Is this a good or bad thing?

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Introduction
In order to meet up with the newest, a lot of people have purchased just out laptops or mobile phones. Personally, I see
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 as a good idea due to everyday advancement in
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Body paragraph 1
In these days and age, the rate at which automation is changing is at a higher progression which calls for people to keep up with
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 to avoid being outdated. Some believe getting a new gadget is a means of showing one's status
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myself
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The
 more expensive and modern the laptop is the higher the class one is perceived to belong in the society.
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, previous
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 may lack some facility needed by the user, as
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, it may require upgrading or purchasing another one. To illustrate, the camera resolution
,
Accept space
,
 memory size and operating system of contemporary phones cannot be compared to that of some years back. Beforehand, infrared
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 was being used before the advent of Bluetooth, WiFi, Xender e.t.
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C
 which
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is
 more efficient and faster than the former.
Body paragraph 2
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, the bad side of
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 notion has to be considered
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to be
 that the means of getting funded to acquire
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technology
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 may be illicit as ladies do all sorts of things like prostitution, scamming, stealing in order to buy it.
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 pose a negative effect on them because some fall into the hands of the wrong person who uses them for rituals leading to untimely death, running mad as prevalent when blackberry phones were newly introduced in the market.
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, another fact put into consideration is that the quality of
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 current
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, it is usually more powerful and effective as it is mostly tailored to improving on the deficiencies of the former.
Conclusion
On a final note, the good of moving with the pace of
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 cannot be compared to the bad side.
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, the upgrade in
technology
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 is typically to provide solutions to challenge of the past

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