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Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Global
climate
change
 has posed a considerable threat to life on Earth over the
last
 few years. While many people argue that living with it is inevitable, I believe that
this
 is wrong and that we should devise methods to tackle the
problem
. There are several measurements humanity can take to mitigate adverse effects on
climate
change
.
Firstly
, governments and individuals could help to reduce a substantial amount of carbon dioxide emissions that lead to global warming by using public means of transportation
such
 as buses or subway trains
instead
 of personal vehicles.
Secondly
, to restore the balance of O2 and CO2 proportion in the atmosphere, authorities, along with the help of the citizens, could grow more trees in urban and barren areas.
Finally
, renewable energy technologies
such
 as solar, wind, or tidal wave energy should be developed and widely implemented in industrial production and daily activities.
This
 measurement would eventually curb carbon dioxide emissions by a significant amount and
therefore
 prevent the greenhouse effect from deteriorating.
On the other hand
, living with the current
problem
 might lead to some severe consequences.
First
 of all, rising temperatures have already worsened extreme weather events.
For example
, the recent severe
heatwave
Suggestion
Heatwave
 has caused deaths to thousands of people in countries
such
 as India, and France, which is why we should address
this
 issue urgently to avoid similar incidents shortly.
Besides
, global
climate
change
 has already negatively affected natural habitats of various species on Earth. Typical examples of
this
problem
 could be the shrinking territories of polar bears and penguins due to increased ice thawing in regions of both poles of the Earth or deaths of numerous coral reefs due to warmer seawater temperature. In conclusion, I believe that it is unacceptable to live with the current state of
climate
change
; and we should
instead
 come up with solutions for
this
 serious
problem
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • climate change
  • prevent
  • adaptation
  • mitigation
  • cope with
  • effects
  • shift
  • mindset
  • lifestyle
  • balance
  • invest
  • research
  • technology
  • crucial
  • education
  • awareness
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