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the chart below shows the number of travellers using three major airport un New York City between 1995 and 2000

the chart below shows the number of travellers using three major airport un New York City between 1995 and 2000
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The bar chart compares the
number
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 of travellers using three major
aiports
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airports
 in New York City from 1995 to 2000 .
Overal
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, we can see that there always have the
number
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 of travellers
change
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changes
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 each year. Another thing
can
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 be easily seen
that
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 the LaGuardia airports almost have the most travellers every year, between 1995 and 2000. From 1995 to 1997 , the
Newwark
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Newark
aiports
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airports
 took the
least
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last
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 place of the mi,ber of people using major
aiports
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airports
, just about 15
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millions
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 to less than 40
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millions
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million
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 in 1997 . In opposite ,
the
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john F.Kennedy’s
passeners
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passengers
 increased
hardly
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 in the same 4 years and had the highest
number
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 of
traverllers
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travellers
 in 1997 which
were
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was
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 about 46
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millions
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million
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in
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three years later , two airports John F.kenndy and Newark’s
passeners
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passengers
gre
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are
 slowly and even decreased – John F.Kennedy’s passengers decreased from 46
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millions
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million
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 people to over 30
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millions
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million
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 and went up to 44
milions
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million
 in a year later . In that
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time
thime
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time
, LaGuardia lead the
number
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 of passengers and kept growing from around 43
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millions
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million
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 in 1997 to nearly 70 million people in 200 – the
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highest
highes
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highest
 record in over 6 years

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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