Too much emphasis is placed on going university for academic education. People should be encouraged to do vocational training, because there is a lack of qualified tradespeople such as electricians or plumbers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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contradicting

trends in

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the future job market

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market, the number of people who want to get a place in tertiary education to have academic backgrounds is increased while the number of young people studying vocational education is decreased.

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the reason why educators encourage people to pay more attention in vocational study and I personally agree with

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idea. It is not deniable that having an academic degree brings a wide range of positive advantages. Since people graduate from university is likely to get a well-paid

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and admiration from society and family,

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getting those of qualifications.

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, several surveys have shown that the percentage of skilled-

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worker recently is growing excessively in the highly competitive

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market while the percentage of manual-

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candidate is facing a downside.

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, many recent graduates from high education in Vietnam are unemployed because they cannot find a

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so they end up with

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a manual job

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without preparing sufficient skills. The balance between skilled and manual

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is a necessity. People in these two majors need to collaborate, which is to

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, cannot exist without having a house built by constructors and the builder cannot construct a concrete building with no prior design by engineers.

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, each

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has a critical role in the community. All

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kinds

of majors should be received recognition and encouragements significantly. In conclusion, the concentration on manual

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need to be emphasized enough to get more

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students'

student

student's

interest in order to balance the

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market demands.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

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264 words

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Vocational training
Skilled tradespeople
Job market
Financial burden
Traditional four-year university
Local economy
Stigma
Subsidies
Awareness campaigns
Mainstream education system

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Too much emphasis is placed on going university for academic education. People should be encouraged to do vocational training, because there is a lack of qualified tradespeople such as electricians or plumbers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

As transport and accommodation problems are increasing in many cities, some governments encourage businesses to move to rural areas. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

In many countries nowadays, consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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Television sports program shows such Olympic are a good source of motivation for youths who do not like to exercise much. Do you agree or disagree include examples in your answer and provide your owns opinion.