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The chart below shows the number of travellers using three major airports in New York City between 1995 to 2000.

The chart below shows the number of travellers using three major airports in New York City between 1995 to 2000.
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The given bar chart illustrates the
figure
of
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 the tourist using three main
airport
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airports
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 in New York City in 1995 and 2000.
Overall
, both LaGuardia and Newark were
upward
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an upward
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trend
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;
whereas
 the
number
 of John
F.Kennedy
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F. Kennedy
airport
was fluctuated
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fluctuated
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. It is clearly seen that the tourist using John K Kennedy
airport
 just over 25
million
 people in 1995.
Then
, the
figure
 decreased sharply in
next
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the next
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 two years and reach a peak at 47
million
. In 1998 and 1999, the
number
 of travellers using
this
airport
 increased
significal
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significant
significantly
 between 32- 36
million
 over the period. That’s luckily the
number
 rose
up
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 approximately 43
million
 in 2000.
In
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 1995 to 2000 the
figure
of
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for
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 travellers using LaGuardia increased slightly every
each
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apply
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years
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year
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 and reach a peak at approximately 69
million
 in 2000. Newark was similar to that one, it began
just
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with just
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 over 10
million
 which little than two main
airport
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airports
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. But,
in
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from
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 1995 to 1998, that
number
grewth
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growth
grew
 dramatically and reach a peak at 41
million
. After
that
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,that
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 the
figure
 was
unchange
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changed
in
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from
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 1999 to 2000.
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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words figure, airport, number, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • significant increase
  • highest number
  • steady increase
  • largest growth
  • dramatic
  • slowest growth
  • slight decrease
  • gradual increase
  • period
  • travelers
  • major airports
  • followed by
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