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The chart below shows the number of travellers using three major airports in New York City between 1995 to 2000.

The chart below shows the number of travellers using three major airports in New York City between 1995 to 2000.
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The given bar chart illustrates the
figure
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of
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for
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 the tourist using three main
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airport
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airports
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 in New York City in 1995 and 2000.
Overall
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, both LaGuardia and Newark were
upward
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an upward
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trend
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;
whereas
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 the
number
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 of John
F.Kennedy
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F. Kennedy
airport
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was fluctuated
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fluctuated
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. It is clearly seen that the tourist using John K Kennedy
airport
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 just over 25
million
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 people in 1995.
Then
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, the
figure
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 decreased sharply in
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next
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the next
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 two years and reach a peak at 47
million
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. In 1998 and 1999, the
number
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 of travellers using
this
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airport
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 increased
significal
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significant
significantly
 between 32- 36
million
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 over the period. That’s luckily the
number
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 rose
up
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to
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 approximately 43
million
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 in 2000.
In
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From
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 1995 to 2000 the
figure
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of
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for
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 travellers using LaGuardia increased slightly every
each
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apply
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years
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year
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 and reach a peak at approximately 69
million
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 in 2000. Newark was similar to that one, it began
just
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with just
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 over 10
million
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 which little than two main
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airport
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airports
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. But,
in
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from
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 1995 to 1998, that
number
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grewth
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growth
grew
 dramatically and reach a peak at 41
million
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. After
that
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,that
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 the
figure
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 was
unchange
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changed
in
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from
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 1999 to 2000.

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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words figure, airport, number, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • significant increase
  • highest number
  • steady increase
  • largest growth
  • dramatic
  • slowest growth
  • slight decrease
  • gradual increase
  • period
  • travelers
  • major airports
  • followed by
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