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Some people think that all children should learn geography in school. However, some others think that it is more important to learn subjects that are more relevant to life. What is your opinion?

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It is true that children should learn subjects that are important in life, but I differ with those who think that the other subjects like
geography
 are not to be taught to children. Knowledge is absorbed best while at a tender age and that might be the reason for it to spark an
interest
 in the subject and it might as well reflect on the child's future unknowingly.
First
 of all teaching the subjects like
geography
 to children at a younger age has a huge impact on how they model their future.
This
 kind of introduction to the topic at
such
 a tender age sparks an
interest
 in children, which in turn may lead them to be specialists in their respective field.
For example
, if
geography
 wasn't taught by Neil Degress Tyson while he was in school, he might not have developed an
interest
 in astronomy and physics. His contribution in the field has led to great developments in terms of his field and have reflected onto other fields of study.
Furthermore
, teaching children subjects similar to
geography
 leads them to have a better General Knowledge. It is one thing to be successful in life just because of your skill, whereas being someone who is devoid of basic knowledge is not a person who can succeed in life as much as he would have if he had the knowledge.
For instance
, if you are a successful businessman and don't know the geographical divisions in which your business might flourish,
then
 you are at a disadvantage compared to your competitors. In conclusion, I would like to say that all children should learn subjects
such
 as
Geography
 as they might develop an
interest
 in that subjects or it might be useful to them without their knowledge.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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