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how does the village park's map change throughout 10 years

#village #park #change #years
The two d
iagram
Suggestion
diagrams
c
ompate
examine and note the similarities or differences of
compare
complete
the changes to the development in a village
park
 over the period of 10 years In g
eneral it
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general, it
can v
e
have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)
be
e
viden
clearly revealed to the mind or the senses or judgment
evident
from the diagram that the village
park
 experienced considerable changes during the whole period. The most noticeable d
ifferents
the quality of being unlike or dissimilar
difference
differences
between t
wo diagrams
Suggestion
the two diagrams
are the entrance was remained u
nchage
of a particle or body or system; having no charge
uncharged
and the appearance of p
icnic
Suggestion
the picnic area
a picnic area
area
 As can be seen from the diagram
,
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,
in the p
reiod
an amount of time
period
of 10 years the woods located in the east were destroyed to make way for new café
.
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.
Similarly
,
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,
a p
on
a geometric element that has position but no extension
point
in the east of the d
iaram
a drawing intended to explain how something works; a drawing showing the relation between the parts
diagram
dream
drum
is replaced by a boating lake
.
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.
A new picnic
area
 is built i
n
Suggestion
on
the empty ground in the west of the
park
.
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.
There is an appearance of t
oilet
Suggestion
the toilet
in the east of the
park
 Turning to other details
,
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,
we can see that the children play
area
 is divided into two features w
ere
In or at or to what place
where
children play
area
 and c
hilldrean
Suggestion
children's
children
soft play
area
.
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.
In the middle of the village
park
,
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,
the football pitch is narrowed a half
.
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.
The car
p
ark in the wes
Suggestion
in the park was
park in the was
park in the west
park in the West
expanded from 20rs to 50 cars over the whole period.
Moreover
 , the tenniscout are expanded into four courts
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