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show the changes of the village park's map 10 years ago and now

#show #changes #village #park #years
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The maps illustrate the changing in a
village
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park
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 10 years ago and at the m
omment
a particular point in time
moment
.
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.
 Overall
,
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,
we can see that the
village
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park
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 witnessed a great deal of changes between two different times
Firstly
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,
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,
in the past
,
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,
village
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park
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 got only 2 tennis c
ourt but
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court, but
courts but
courts courts but
at the m
omment
a particular point in time
moment
this
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 number has double with the number in the past
.
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.
The car
park
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 in the
park
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 just allowed 20 c
ars but
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cars, but
now it’s bigger and can contain 50 cars The picnic
area
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 is a
peeared
separated or at a distance in place or position or time
apart
under the football pitch and the toilet
also
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 appears beside the football pitch
,
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,
The pond and woods were transformed to the boating a
lek
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Alek
and the café
.
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.
Also
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 a cycle path is a
ppeared
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appearing
around the whole
village
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park
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On the other hand
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,b
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,
oth children p
la
participate in games or sport
play
area
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 and football p
ithc
throw or toss with a light motion
pitch
are reduced the
area
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.
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The childrean play
area
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 is seperated into 2 different
area
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 : children play
area
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 and children soft play
area
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