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Write an essay about headphones 1)Describe the statement 2)Support each other sides

#headphones #support
One of the urgent gadgets which takes an important part of our life are headphones. Because their usage are increasing day by day dramatically. We use headphones in different situations .
For inst
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ce,when we ar
e
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driving .
However
,
o
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ne of the advantages of headphones are better qual
ity of music o
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a better quality
r audio. We can hear voice of au
dio b
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voices
etter in crowdy plac
es . N
overfilled or compacted or concentrated
crowded
owadays
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we can see some headphones
which are withou
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headphones, which
t wires. They are connected using bluetooth a
nd we can
(computing, trademark) a short range wireless technology for connecting different devices such as computers and mobile phones
Bluetooth
 listen to music from distance of
30-40 m
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a distance
etres.
In addition
 are good invention . I guess
th
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at if you hear some word in low volume in English when you are slepping yo
u can re
the state of being asleep
sleeping
member them.
On the other hand
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phones can be cause of
illness
for the reason that; on account of
because
. When you use much headphones can be cause of
hearing
for the reason that; on account of
because
 lose. It’s
sadl
something that is lost
loss
y if we
are
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sad
deaf. We can not hea
r anyth
can not
cannot
ing with
this
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phones are necessa
ry
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is
for us in present years,but we sho
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ld be carefully.
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careful

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