Nowadays technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing (for example through cellphone tracking and security cameras).In many cases,the people being monitored are unaware that this is happening . Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages ?

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will mention how downsides of the technologies can be converted into upsides. Digital technology and advancement has paved a way to decrease vulnerabilities and crimes in the world.Since we are now facilitated to monitor the
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fashion, we
are now prompted on the prospective crimes or vulnerabilities prior to its
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For example
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a 360 degree camera installed around our house can now prompt us on a
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attempt in and around our house through text message appended with a snap of the act, triggers the security alarm in our house and most importantly sends a message to a nearby police station.
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the state of being vulnerable or exposed
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of
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since there are no mentions on the
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and they get into trouble.
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in a shop if there are signboards saying that the shop is monitored can certainly help the customers walking
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