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Caring for children is probably the most important job in any society. Because of that all mothers and fathers should be required to take the childcare training courses. Do you agree or disagree?

#children #job #society #mothers #fathers #childcare #courses
Poor countries need to be supported by richer nations. Take technical support as an example.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Parenting skills
  • Child development
  • Societal progress
  • Parental responsibility
  • Gender equality in parenting
  • Mandatory training
  • Childcare expertise
  • Family dynamics
  • Parent-child relationship
  • Emotional development
  • Physical development
  • Educational development
  • Parental autonomy
  • Socioeconomic accessibility
  • Voluntary attendance
  • Neglect and abuse prevention
  • Knowledge acquisition
  • Informed decision-making
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