Caring for children is probably the most important job in any society. Because of that all mothers and fathers should be required to take the childcare training courses. Do you agree or disagree?

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Poor countries need to be supported by richer nations. Take technical support as an example.

This

would make several benefits for financially deprived countries.

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is because by getting technological knowledge can be assisted them to build infrastructures; schools, colleges, and roads . By

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nvesting on these nations could bring many advantages to the rich open as they can expand business to th

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e areas as well. Other people consider that the rich ones have their own difficulties to tackle it. Tax payers money effectively channelised to improving their requirements and advancing facilities. Apart from

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, most of the underdeveloped countries have been seriously affected by corruptions,

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must be eliminated by enforcing both stricter law and harder punishment too.

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of depending on developed nations, these countries should develop some strategies to counteract above mentioned problems.

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, a recent research has been reported that financial aid, mostly creates a dependency rather than finding lasting solution to their fundamental issues.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

2 paragraphs

160 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Parenting skills
Child development
Societal progress
Parental responsibility
Gender equality in parenting
Mandatory training
Childcare expertise
Family dynamics
Parent-child relationship
Emotional development
Physical development
Educational development
Parental autonomy
Socioeconomic accessibility
Voluntary attendance
Neglect and abuse prevention
Knowledge acquisition
Informed decision-making

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