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Some people believe that it is important to give gifts and presents to friends and family to show that we care about them. Others think that there are better ways to show affection to them. Discuss both the view and give your opinion.

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Now a days
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Nowadays
, many people think that give a
gifts
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gift
 and presents to friends and family to express their feelings about them. While some people assert that there are more appropriate
way
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 to portray
there
of them or themselves
their
 love and care
to
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for
of
 them.
This
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 essay will Discuss both of views with my opinion in future paragraph. To start with, there are
multifurious
having many aspects
multifarious
 point to promote give
gift
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gifts
 to friends and family.
First
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 and foremost, some people give gifts and presents to make the memories.
Also
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, they are
show
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showing
shown
 their priorities for them to enhance
relationship
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the relationship
relationships
a relationship
.
In
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During
 the festival
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time many
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time, many
 people send a
gifts
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gift
 to their relatives for
increse
become bigger or greater in amount
increase
 the
effection
the pathological state resulting from the invasion of the body by pathogenic microorganisms
infection
 and make the strong bond.
Additionaly
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Additionally
, our
hectric
marked by intense agitation or emotion
hectic
 schedule
increse
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increases
increase
increased
 the communication gap so present a gift is beneficial for us.
However
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, other people think that not only give gifts and presents to make a good Bond with them. While the most effective
way
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 to make a good relationship is spend a quality
time
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 with friends and family like arrange a dinner for them
also
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 invite to friends and family to make a memorable
moments
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moment
. To make a good connection we can help them in financial
way
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 as well as supporting them in their thick and thin situation and provide some advice and guide them with encouraging words. To, conclude with, giving gifts not only the best
way
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 to express their feelings to friends and family. They have
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
way
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 to show
attechment
a feeling of affection for a person or an institution
attachment
attachments
 with them like
spend
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spending
 a quality
time
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 with them and helping to your friends. To the my
perspective spending
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perspective, spending
 a quality
time
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 with friends and family is a
best
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better
way
Use synonyms
 to express love for them.

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