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Nowadays, as women and men have to work full time, household duties should be equally divided. Do you agree or disagree?

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House-hold
work
 used to be held accountable by women. Some people think that in the modern life, women and men are on equal footing in
household
 duties while others claim that men are exempt from these responsibilities
for
Suggestion
in
 their busy outside
work
. I strongly agree with the statement for the following reasons.
First
, it is contended that men are
bread-winners
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the breadwinners
breadwinners
 of families. So busy with outside
work
 to earn money to support their families are men that they are unable to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
household
 jobs, despite their willingness.
Nevertheless
, after years of struggling for equity, both men and women are capable of outside and
household
work
. With more and more women becoming successful in their career thanks to their knowledge and skills, it is inevitable that men are supposed to share duties. Some men who are unemployed due to their lack of savvy should be ready to help women with
this
,
instead
 of holding
such
 prejudices. In countries where no discrimination exists, there are an increasing number of female scientists and politicians.
Second
, women are said to be better
household
 doers. By dint of having inherent traits
such
 as carefulness, gentleness and self-sacrifice, they can perform better their opposite sex in these tasks.
However
, surveys have shown that there are more outstanding male cooks than female ones, which proves that men are possibly equally excellent in doing housework.
Besides
, only by performing these sacred tasks do men come to appreciate the devotion and commitment of women who prioritize family over their careers.
In addition
, when
two sexes
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the two sexes
 are dedicated to the completion of
household
 jobs, they can learn from each other, both strengths and weaknesses. Born and growing up in families with equal sharing of fathers and mothers, children
hold
Suggestion
holds
 less discrimination against any sex and become ready helpers for their mothers and future wives. In brief, the equitable sharing of
household
 duties is definitely a must for any society which wants to develop.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • domestic responsibilities
  • gender equality
  • dual income
  • traditional gender roles
  • egalitarian household
  • societal attitudes
  • work-life balance
  • parental leave
  • flexible work hours
  • harmonious partnership
  • sharing chores
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