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Some people think that the age limit for driving should be increased to make driving safer, do you agree or disagree?

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Recently, the casualty rate of traffic accident keeps on soaring at a startling rate, one of the reasons can be largely owed to unsafe driving. Under
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 circumstance, an opinion springs up that stricter limitation should be implemented to regulate the
age
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 of drivers. I agree with
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 proposal.
First
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, safe driving is no doubt essential for both drivers and pedestrians. An experienced and highly
skillful
having or showing knowledge and skill and aptitude
skilful
 driver usually needs long training and practice. In
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 sense, drivers who are under the
age
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 of 18, in most cases, fail to have sufficient time to perfect their driving techniques. Meanwhile, young drivers sometimes like to take a risk to
savor
derive or receive pleasure from; get enjoyment from; take pleasure in
savour
 the excitement of driving, thereby, they are more likely to cause more traffic accidents, which will not only agonize the victims but
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 ruin the young drivers’ own future. The debate reminds me of a story, a teenage driver illegally drove his father’s
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 during the rush hours, unsurprisingly, he knocked down an old man. He had no choice but to face the severe penalty of the law.
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, the stricter
age
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 limitation for drivers is especially suitable for those senior drivers.
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 senior drivers might be adept at driving a
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, their energy, eyesight, reaction ability sometimes cannot make them cope with some unexpected traffic conditions. Once tragedy occurs, nothing can be done to compensate for the price of life. In order to ensure the security of driving, prevention is better than cure,
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, to carry out
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 limitation among drivers is quite preferable and feasible. Some people might remain
skeptical
denying or questioning the tenets of especially a religion
sceptical
 about my stand. One argument
might be hold
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might be held
might behold
 by some people is that the right of steering a
car
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 should not be deprived no matter how young or old one driver might be.
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,
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 new regulation might dampen one's interest of driving a
car
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 or create real inconvenience for some
old
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older
 people. Still, some people might argue that the sale of automobile industry might suffer from
downturn
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the downturn
 if the new law of regulating the
age
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 of drivers is enacted and popularized. What I want to rebut,
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,
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,
 is that we have no reason to ignore the potential threat triggered by perilous driving.
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, to limit
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age
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the age
 of drivers is a feasible option. Overall, I re-affirm my conviction that life tops all. In light of
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, it is a commendable approach to strictly limit the
age
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 of drivers.
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 wise strategy will benefit the drivers and the pedestrians.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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