Scientists believe that by studying behavior of 3 years old children, we can predict if that child can become criminal in the future. To what extent is crime a product of human nature? Is it possible to stop children from growing to be a criminal?

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Some scientists are of the opinion that hereditary characteristics are responsible for the person’s temperament and
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future career. I disagree with
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notion. I believe that genes do play a
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the primary determinant is nurture – education and bringing up. It is definitely possible to mould a child into any direction by proper bringing-up. If we adopt the mindset that if parents are criminals so will the children be
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we are limiting or even damaging the individual’s basic right to achieve his very best. Children can rise above the gene pool and rise to great heights. Even if a child is born to criminal
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brought up away from that environment and provided quality education, he will not be a criminal. The debate on nature versus nurture has been raging for ages and no clear cut answer has come forward. A child prodigy can be born to ordinary parents and many intelligent parents can have ordinary children. A talented person can go unnoticed in the absence of right environment and upbringing and an ordinary person can reach great heights with proper training. So,
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the interplay
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heredity
and environmental factors must be there. It has been seen that children born to intelligent parents
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are also intelligent and
successful. But it is
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possible that
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parents provide an environment which nurtures the development of their children. When we see some programmes
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as ‘India’s Got Talent’ and ‘Little Champs’, we notice some extremely gifted children who are born with talent and
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some who have achieved great heights with great perseverance and proper coaching. To put it in a nutshell, I pen
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that both nature and nurture play a part in determining the character of a person. It can
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be concluded that both are inextricably linked with each other. But nurture weighs over nature and it is definitely possible to prevent children from growing up to be criminals.
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