Some people think that shops should not be allowed to sell food or drinks that are scientifically proven to be bad for people's health. Do you agree or disagree?

Shops

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should not be allowed to sell any

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or drink that have been scientifically

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proven

to have bad effects to people’s

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. To what extent do you agree or disagree? While some foods and drinks

have been proved

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have proven

heath-destructive, I disagree with the view that they should be prohibited in all shops. There are many reasons to believe that the sales of foods and drinks damaging to people’s

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produces negative effects.

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, some fast

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contains excessive amount of fat and calories, and if adults consume too much of them, they will become sick, being unable to undertake

works

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work

or even to live normal lives. More importantly, some drinks,

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as coca cola, enjoy wide

popularity

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popular

among young children. These drinks involve chemicals that can devastate human bones, and as children are in a key stage of growing up, taking these drinks can have negative

influence

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Influence

on their physical development. All these factors add up to the

thinking

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Thinking

that shops should not be encouraged to sell

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-damaging foods and

drinks

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Drinks

.

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, despite the serious impact

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of

health

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, the sales of these foods and drinks should not be forbidden in all shops. Many important traditional snacks are considered unhealthy, due

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being too oily or salty, but they are not

regarded as main

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regarded as a main

food

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.Provided they are taken in minimal amount, the damage to people’s

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is

acceptable

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Acceptable

, and people can settle the

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problem by taking exercises.

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, a

big

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The biggest

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proportion of these foods are fast

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, which provide considerable benefits for people in workplaces, because it can fit into those people’s tight

schedule

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schedules

. If shops are barred from selling foods like hamburgers and sandwiches,

those

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these

people will end up in great inconvenience. In conclusion,

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some

food

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and drink are claimed harmful to

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in scientific terms

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I believe that a comprehensive restraining order is not necessary.