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In some countries, shopping online is replacing shopping at store. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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Currently, people are increasingly doing their shopping on the Internet
instead
 of going to stores. I personally believe
this
 tendency has both positive and negative effects, which will be discussed below. On the one hand, there are some benefits of online shopping.
Firstly
, it is a quicker and cheaper way to shop since people can buy products at home without having to go to stores or shopping malls.
For example
, Amazon and eBay are two popular websites that provide a huge number of different products, and customers can visit those sites and make purchases easily.
As a result
, consumers can save time and the costs of travelling.
Secondly
, online shopping allows people to have a wider range of choices as they can compare different brands and products.
For instance
, buyers can easily compare the shoes of Converse and Vans, while it is difficult to do that at physical stores.
On the other hand
, online shopping can be negative in several ways. The
first
 drawback is that customers cannot try products before making a purchase.
For example
, a girl cannot try wearing a dress to see if it fits her body.
Furthermore
, products sold online are often less reliable, and the product that people
finally
 get delivered to their house might have a poorer quality than expected.
Finally
, because online shopping is easier and cheaper, people tend to buy too much, which would lead to a large waste of money.
This
 is less likely to happen if shopping in stores is more popular. In conclusion, I believe the fact that shopping on the Internet is replacing shopping in physical stores is both positive and negative.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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