Public celebrations (national days, festivals) are held in many countries. Some people say that these celebrations are a waste of money and we should spend money on more important things. Do you agree or disagree?

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People argue that it is wasteful to celebrate public events and festivals, and

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amount of money should be allocated to other areas. Personally, I disagree with

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view, and I believe that national celebrations are necessary because they could offer a host of economic and social benefits to communities. There are several reasons why these festivals could boost the economy of a country. The

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reason is that they could stimulate the growth of tourism and other related businesses. It often appears that

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events attract many tourists, and they spend a substantial of money not only on admission fees, parking fees but

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on hotels, restaurants, souvenir shops. The

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reason is that well-organized celebrations could provide free marketing and advertising for local business.

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, when they go back home, visitors could talk their friends about fun experiences and beautiful scenery, and they even post comments or pictures on social networking websites

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as Facebook or Twitter.

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, from the social perspective, national celebrations are

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advantageous.

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is an effective way to preserve core cultural values of a nation and strengthen relationships.

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, Lunar New Year is an irreplaceable part of

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the Vietnamese people

when families gather together to

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recollect

past events and

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ancestors

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the ancestors

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, festivals and events help foster a sense of pride within a community by celebrating

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the things

that make a city special and evoke good feelings. An excellent example is that Danang city is well-known for its International Firework Festival;

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event not only helps enhance

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the city’s reputation

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bring happiness and

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to local residents. In conclusion, I would argue that it is completely justifiable to hold national events and festivals because of

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the advantages

they bring to our country.

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Public celebrations (national days, festivals) are held in many countries. Some people say that these celebrations are a waste of money and we should spend money on more important things. Do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Some people work for the same organization all their life. Others think that it is better to work for different organization. Discuss both views and gives your opinion.

In the past, when students did a , they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study abroad? Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?