Public celebrations (national days, festivals) are held in many countries. Some people say that these celebrations are a waste of money and we should spend money on more important things. Do you agree or disagree?

People argue that it is wasteful to celebrate public events and festivals, and
this
amount of money should be allocated to other areas. Personally, I disagree with
this
view, and I believe that national celebrations are necessary because they could offer a host of economic and social benefits to communities. There are several reasons why these festivals could boost the economy of a country. The
first
reason is that they could stimulate the growth of tourism and other related businesses. It often appears that
such
events attract many tourists, and they spend a substantial of money not only on admission fees, parking fees but
also
on hotels, restaurants, souvenir shops. The
second
reason is that well-organized celebrations could provide free marketing and advertising for local business.
For example
, when they go back home, visitors could talk their friends about fun experiences and beautiful scenery, and they even post comments or pictures on social networking websites
such
as Facebook or Twitter.
On the other hand
, from the social perspective, national celebrations are
also
advantageous.
Firstly
,
this
is an effective way to preserve core cultural values of a nation and strengthen relationships.
For example
, Lunar New Year is an irreplaceable part of
Vietnamese people
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the Vietnamese people
when families gather together to
recollected
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recollect
past events and
honor
bestow honor or rewards upon
honour
ancestors
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the ancestors
.
Secondly
, festivals and events help foster a sense of pride within a community by celebrating
things
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the things
that make a city special and evoke good feelings. An excellent example is that Danang city is well-known for its International Firework Festival;
this
event not only helps enhance
city’s reputation
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the city’s reputation
but
also
bring happiness and
fulfillment
a feeling of satisfaction at having achieved your desires
fulfilment
to local residents. In conclusion, I would argue that it is completely justifiable to hold national events and festivals because of
advantages
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the advantages
they bring to our country.
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