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Today the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree with these views?

#sales #consumer #goods #power #society
I’m writing to you about the problems we faced at the
reception
 while visiting your
company
. We were a group of four people who had come for some official work. To our surprise, the
reception
area
 was very congested and we barely able to walk around,
also
 the receptionist was occupied replying to queries of visitors and she
didn’t paid
Suggestion
didn’t pay
hasn’t paid
 attention to our question. The
reception
area
 is the face of the
company
. It gives a
first
 impression about the
company
’s hospitality and the overall outlook. There are many visitors that visit the
company
 for various purposes,
such
 bad impression would deter the image of the
company
 in the public. I have
few suggestion
Suggestion
a few suggestions
few suggestions
 to give you as how you can improve the
reception
area
.
Firstly
, the
reception
area
 should be extended, so to accommodate more people.
Also
, proper sitting facilities should be organised.
Secondly
, you can keep a
second
 receptionist so that all the queries of the visitors are answered in time. I hope that my suggestion might be of some help to you. Yours faithfully, XYZ

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