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Most people believe money is a very important consideration when choosing a job as it can help you get a better lifestyle; however, there are some who believe it is more important to have a job you enjoy and that this, and not money, will lead to greater happiness and a more balanced per sonal life. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Certainly,
money
 has become
basic necessity
Suggestion
a basic necessity
 of
life
,
therefore
,
majority
Suggestion
the majority
 of people think that people should give more preference to salary rather than
job
Suggestion
a job
.
However
, other people believe that importance of satisfactory
job
 is more in
happy
Suggestion
a happy life
life
. In my view, believe that
profession
Suggestion
the profession
 is more important than
money
. On the one side,
money
 is a very crucial factor for
survive
Suggestion
surviving
.
In other words
, it
can not
can not
cannot
 be denied that
money
 is
primary source
Suggestion
the primary source
a primary source
 to full fill their rudimentary needs as well as enjoying
luxurious
Suggestion
a luxurious life, such
a luxurious life such
life
such
 as better education, modern equipments and enjoying every aspect of
life
. To exemplify, Ambani, Indian most affluent person, who have hundreds modern and luxurious vehicles, even a personal jet, and he has been gone foreign tours for thousand times, because he
have
Suggestion
has
 a wealth. One the other side, there are those who believe that people should follow their profession, because,
although
 having a good wage could give us physical pleasure, it
can not
can not
cannot
 provide psychological happiness and satisfactory
life
. Ambani,
for example
, despite having enormous wealth he is suffering from various health
hazardous
Suggestion
hazards
 and personal
life
 disputes, perhaps he
not have
Suggestion
doesn't have
 a time for their family and himself In my views, even though
money
a quantifier that can be used with count nouns and is often preceded by 'as' or 'too' or 'so' or 'that'; amounting to a large but indefinite number
many
also
 a significant factor of
job
Suggestion
a job
the job
, if important factor are becoming pernicious for your precious
life
, it should not be prioritized. Because,
money
 can be something, not be everything. Conclusion, advantages of
job
 satisfaction are than salary in people personal
life
.
Accept space
.
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