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Reducing global environmental damage should be by governments rather than individuals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#damage #governments #individuals
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Global environmental damage
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The global environmental damage
 has become a major cancer in recent time. And some people are with the view that
government
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 should be responsible in minimizing it
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,
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 of individuals.
This
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 essay will argue, why
government
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 should take absolute control in managing
this
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 problem
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 with, policy makers all over the world should amend their constitutions to help improve the environment. Since the
government
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 has got some form of power to change, adjust, add or eliminate a portion of the constitution,
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 should be channeled in protecting the environment. In 2005, a selected number of countries adjusted their laws to protect wildlife,
forthern
being one more than thirteen
fourteen
 years down the lane, they can
boost
show off
boast
 of an improvement in that regards
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.
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 believe the same can be done with global warming.
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, personnel’s should be recruited to enforce
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the laws
 and that can only be feasible to a large extent if the
government
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 is actively involved. The
government
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 should employ people in various communities to enforce laws pertaining to environmental protection.
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, the use of echo friendly materials- paper bags
in
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on
 shopping
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 of the traditional rubbers.
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 afforestation should be applauded while the contrary
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,
gravely punished
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 In conclusion, despite the fact that
government
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 has a major role to play in
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 menace, individual collaboration would
also
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 go a long way in helping with the situation.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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