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Both the poor and the rich find the accessibility into university difficult. Do you agree or disagree

#accessibility #university
Some people believe that getting a university seat is very difficult for both poor and rich children
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but
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But
 I do not quite agree with
this
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according
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According
 to my
opinion it
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opinion, it
 is very easy for a child who belongs to
affluent family
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an affluent family
affluent families
 to get admitted to good universities while compared to
poor child
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poor children
the poor child
a poor child
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This
 essay will discuss
various factor
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the various factors
various factors
 supporting for
this
 argument.
To begin
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 being born in a wealthy family is a boon. In the present era people from affluent family can easily achieve
everything including
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everything, including
 a university
seats
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seat
 by money and influence.Nowadays
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,
 almost all universities
have reserved
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reserve
 15% of their seats for NRI people or people ready to give
high amount
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high amounts
a high amount
 of capitulation fees
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The children from rich
families thereby
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families, thereby
 get a chance to choose their favourite course without even appearing for an entrance exam.
In
addition affluent
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addition, affluent
 family members always keep good relationship with politicians or other high society members so it is easy for them to utilize these contacts for
recommendation
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recommendations
the recommendation
. On other hand child from poor family background always strive for admission.
First
 reason there is no reservation for poor students in
any
quantifier; used with either mass nouns or plural count nouns to indicate an unspecified number or quantity
some
 universities. Students have to successfully complete their entrance exam in order to get admission in
education institution
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educational institutions
educational institution
an educational institution
. A recent Survey conducted in India reveals the fact that 50% college dropouts were from low financial background family. To recapitulate
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 the people from
poor family
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poor families
always depends
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always depend
 on their scholarship for
studies where as
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studies, whereas
studies whereas
 wealthy students can get number of choice only because of their money.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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